you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letterExplain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your wo

Essay topics:

you work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months

Say how your work could be done while you are away

Ask for him/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr. Roberts,

I am writing to ask for an opportunity to work in our head office in the United States for six months. Working with our team in the past 5 years, I was able to dealt with the majority of the projects I was assigned, and was commented as hardworking and dedicated. In the email our Human Resource manager send to the employees last week, there is 6 month position available for internal employees. The job description is very similar to what I am in charge of right now but requires a more comprehensive market research. I think it is a perfect chance to further improve performance on conducting a research, and I could also show what I learnt to other coworkers when I am back.

If I could get the opportunity, Sarah who is my assistant will take part of my work, and we will keep in touch on a daily basis while I am away to make sure that things are going smoothly in the office.

I greatly appreciate if you could talk to the Human Resource manager to figure out the best time for the 6 month position.

Thank you for your time and consideration and I look forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Amanda Hardy

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 954.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52132701422 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66097601144 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630331753555 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 291.6 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0533775118 44.8134815571 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 76.5299724578 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 16.8248392259 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24436180934 0.216113520407 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950807387339 0.0766984524023 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905687240395 0.0603063233224 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130823498703 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742132010507 0.0580467560999 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.