You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country.Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Essay topics:

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country.Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Mr Morgan,

I am from Iran and now live in Tehran and am getting my master's degree in graphic arts from Art University.I am writing a letter requesting you to receive information on this seminar as the secretary of the seminar.

To write my dissertation, I need to attend this seminar and use new material about graphics. And to interview Mr. Simon, one of the famous graphic artists.If I can't attend the seminar I can't get my degree and as a result I will have trouble getting started in a reputable company.

have heard a lot of compliments from your senior management and I hope you can help me.I would like you to give me general information on the topic of the seminar or email me with seminar brochures if possible.And also information on which seminar will take place in France. Which hotel will host the participants?And what the meals will be like. Are we going to eat at the hotel or at the seminar?

I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible

Yours faithfully,

Daniali

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 849.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71666666667 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77783888822 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 290.88556701 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.7697114724 44.8134815571 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.285714286 76.5299724578 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 16.8248392259 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 4.34317383033 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207949216151 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849181045925 0.0766984524023 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542472407519 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109630570603 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642654588846 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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