Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could

Essay topics:

Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask some more questions about the trip

Dear Miss. Thompson,

I am writing to express my interest in the trip for my kid, which has been organized by your school to other country, Canada.
With regards to the trip, I am keen to join the journey for three days as my child is curious to explore and see different culture of another part of the world. At the same time, I am little worried as my son falls sick with the change of weather.

Additionally, if I could be the part of your journey it would be of great help to you because of my experience as a guide. I even hold the degree of tourism and have worked in that country for a while. Also, I am well aware of children’s capabilities and their behaviors, I can easily assist you with the maintenance of orderly groups during their outing.

I would appreciate it if you can provide me with the itinerary as I have to arrange some daily requirements for my husband. Besides, please let me know if outfits are included in tour fees, so that I do not end up carrying heavy luggage.
I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
urvashi

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of orderly groups during their outing. I would appreciate it if you can provid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 878.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43434343434 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54909952271 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641414141414 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0962709554 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201818438138 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699189858245 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522048178704 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085373133842 0.12726935374 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419026349903 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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