Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go Write a letter to the head teacher In your letter Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could

Essay topics:

Your child is going away on a school trip for three days to another country. The head teacher wants some parents to join the trip and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask some more questions about the trip

Dear Miss. Thompson,

I am writing to express my interest in the trip for my kid, which has been organized by your school to other country, Canada.

With regards to the trip, I am keen to join this tour for three days as my child is curious to explore and see different culture of another part of the world. At the same time, I am little worried as my son falls sick with the change of weather.

Additionally, if I could be the part of your journey it would be of great help to you because of my awareness of tourist spots to particular country. As, I am very well versed with kids engagement activities and have depth knowledge of their mood types, so I will be watchful.

On top of it, I would like to know the dates when the travel is getting finalized and what other mandatory equipment’s has to be kept. Besides, the country has cold weather, what clothing is included in tour fees.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
urvashi

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, look, so, well, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 798.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 177.0 206.0 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50847457627 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47961461134 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4050570079 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 4.34317383033 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192783331307 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669955535964 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493114259625 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789951727774 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365327603561 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 70.7449484536 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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