Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money.

Essay topics:

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money.

Dear Sir or madam,

I am writing to you about the proposed closure of fitness and relaxation centre in my community. I understand the fact that you are experiencing financially difficulties at the moment but I am of the opinion that it is not worth closing it down because of the immense purpose the centre serves my family , friends and I. It is a place where we relax and exercise to keep fit.

The centre is very crucial to the general community, as this is a place where most people gets to socialize and exercise due to the sedentary lifestyles most people live.

Needless to say, there are just a couple of functional parks around , where kids as well as their parents could catch some fun , and closing it will, impact negatively on the socialization abilities of everyone and may encourage overweight related diseases , as it is the only place people uses as fitness club to shed some weight and live healthy.

Yours faithfully,

Rose Sharon

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 166.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80120481928 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69193978246 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644578313253 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.043843981 44.8134815571 241% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 132.833333333 76.5299724578 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 16.8248392259 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0767023954398 0.216113520407 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405703221483 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268232856233 0.0603063233224 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.040200830581 0.12726935374 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183207660278 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 8.37731958763 179% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 7.45979381443 169% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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