Art classes such as painting or drawing are important for children's development, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?
It is supposed by some people that art subjects should be officially applied for high school students due to the benefits for children’s growth. While I advocate the importance of these classes, I would argue that these subjects should not become an obligation to students.
To begin with, there are some reasons why painting or drawing should be included in the official education system. First and foremost, art classes might still be unpopular subjects in many countries, especially Asian countries. Therefore, encouraging students to learn art subjects is a way to find out the potential abilities of the children which they could not realize. By contrast, if they do not have an opportunity to try learning art, there could be a waste of geniuses who can contribute their talents to their countries’ development. Secondly, since students have to sketch the landscapes or the appearances of people, they could enrich their imagination and ideas. As a result, these people could apply their brilliant imagination in some other main subjects such as Maths or Physics, which helps to enhance their academic performances.
However, I would argue that it would not be obliged in high school for some reasons. The first reason is that as some poor families have to pay extra money for new compulsory subjects, the financial burden could put heavily on students’ parents. If students are still obliged to join art classes, they might have to quit their studying paths due to their financial conditions. Furthermore, because of the different hobbies amongst students, compulsory would make them accomplish these subjects with negative attitudes. Consequently, this would bring some unwanted impacts and lead to a waste of time and money. For instance, my niece often copies some available pictures on the Internet to hand out to her teacher in the drawing subject, which she could spend this time on her favorite subjects such as Literature or History.
In conclusion, although art classes play a crucial role in children ‘s intellectual development, I believe that students should be permitted to select their favorite subjects instead of being forced.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
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Line 5, column 586, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ring some unwanted impacts and lead to a waste of time and money. For instance, m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26878612717 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80841140979 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552023121387 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3731850732 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.533333333 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8666666667 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229156929943 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817441761894 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700886920856 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162024004955 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414685872342 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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