Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of this pressures and what measure should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of this pressures and what measure should be taken to reduce these pressures?

A prevailing trend among people is that academic atmosphere, social and commercial challenge place a lot of strain on children. This trend continuously increases due to several factors. Yet, there are a number of possible remedies to mitigate this trend.
As children live in this globalization era, the significant cause of the strain is that the increase of grade scores in school subjects. To illustrate this, at school, children should compete for each other to pass a standard grade and achieve a top grade due to school likely publicize it. Thus, this might show a tendency of children to become stressed. Furthermore, the social pressure, especially from parents, is that parental expectation likely impose their children to be what parents have set and this accidentally could mount children’s pressure. In addition, one of the factors of children's strain is that commercial problems such as magazines and internet which are frequently shown the perfect idea of life. For instance, many young public figures share their lifestyles to public which could cause children to imitate them. As a result, when children are not able to follow them due to the financial problem of their families, they might feel anxiety and pressure.
Turning into remedies of these pressures, there are three major possible remedies to address this. Firstly, education system should be transformed to which schools should put what students learn on the top first goal instead of score. This might stimulate children to feel contended themselves and appreciate others at school. Secondly, to lower what parents expect to their children could minimize children’s pressure. Parents are expected to supervise their children implicitly and develop true potential of children. Furthermore, government should limit the commercial contents aiming at children and young public figures should perform a good action.
In conclusion, the factors of children’s pressure are school grades, the high expectation from parents and lifestyles of public figures. Henceforth, several possible solutions such as school’s goal, parents’ perspective and limitation of commercial content would lessen this phenomenon.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61077844311 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95017610148 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547904191617 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3980919828 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.111111111 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233698492603 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742131902343 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373948349369 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136541773952 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390595065244 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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