Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of this pressures and what measure should be taken to reduce these pressures?
A prevailing trend among people is that academic atmosphere, social and commercial aspect place a lot of strain on children. This essay will elaborate several factors why this is happening, and some possible remedies to mitigate this problem.
As children live in this globalization era, one significant cause of the strain is that the increase of grading standards in school subjects. To illustrate this, at school, children usually compete with each other to pass a higher score and even achieve a top grade because schools likely publicize the results. Thus, this situation might make children feel ashamed and stressed if their scores are low. Furthermore, the social pressure comes from parents who often exaggeratedly expect their children to follow what they desire, thereby leading to more stress on children. Another reason that causes pressure on children is that nowadays children are in high exposure of advertisements which they see in television, and their gadgets, and they are easily influenced by public figures who promote the products. Thus, this could influence children to imitate them. As a result, when children are not able to follow them due to the financial problem of their families, they might feel anxious and pressurized in their society.
Turning into remedies of these pressures, there are three major possible remedies to address this. Firstly, education system should always be set to encourage and motivate students by, for instance, sharpening what students are passionate about. This might stimulate children to feel contended themselves and appreciate others at school. Secondly, to lower what parents expect to their children could minimize children’s pressure. Parents are expected to supervise their children implicitly and develop true potential of them. Furthermore, government should limit the commercial contents aiming at children and young public figures should become good role models for children.
In conclusion, the factors of children’s pressure are schools’ higher grading standards, the high expectation from parents and promotion products of public figures. Henceforth, several possible solutions such as school’s goal, parents’ perspective and limitation of commercial content would lessen this phenomenon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73607038123 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89579011654 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592375366569 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9144961434 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.058823529 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279662340853 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892103814211 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507869130428 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154876042289 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052791795536 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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