Computers have made a better and safer world. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Computers have made a better and safer world. Do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly, the computers have exerted the influence on our lives in many aspects namely safety and quality life. From my perspective, as this electronic devices have dramatically changed our world, however they can provide some risks from ones who manufactured. Generally, in this essay I intend to argue about the harmful and constructive effects of these gadgets on our lives as follows.

Firstly, it should be mentioned that the majority of facilities and organizations namely banks and intelligence services are going to be controlled by computers, as a result, they play a significant role in safety and security of various centers. To illustrate this matter better, I would say that even prisons have taken advantages of these systems as the chance of escape by offenders is going less and less as the time goes by.

Equally importantly, all supervisions done by computers have the security bugs which means their functions can be disrupted by hackers. Consequently, these systems has a highly potential to be troublesome in term of securities. Besides, a vast number of companies are annually attacked as the huge amount of valuable information and data would be transformed somewhere else illegally. Hence, the high-profile experts should attempt to increase the security through confidential fire-walls and especial protocols. Nevertheless, accessibility to the innermost parts of secrets will be prepared for professionals in this field to sell them to strange individuals.

To sum up, computers have two-fold performances in this modern age as they have equal contributions to make the universe better place for living. Finally, I believe that the benefits of artificial intelligence far overweigh its weak points.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45724907063 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16533091467 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64312267658 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7614414002 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.333333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121345805173 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402326227053 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052076253552 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755544469202 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368056361946 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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