In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.
There is a fact that in most countries all over the world with a number of people in unemployment usually are the nations where have a low quality of the workforce. Some individuals believe that it is not necessary to focus on providing advanced education to those who do not have the ability to find a job in these countries. I totally disagree with the opinion.
On the one hand, if the government in nations with serious unemployment do not pay more attention to educating their citizens, which can make the unemployment become worse. The reason to put forward to explain the point is that the workers who are educated basically and limitedly will not reach the company’s given standard. Therefore, they would not have more opportunities to find a suitable job, which means that the number of people without a job would increase dramatically. In addition, the increasing number of unemployed can cause a range of social problems. In fact, because of being in unemployment, there are a lot of people have not enough money to pay for living. Nevertheless, they can be tempted to enter illegal actions, which could lead to social instabilities and a wide variety of extremely related issues.
On the other hand, the government should allocate more resources such as investing more public funding, innovating infrastructure for educating their citizens, especially those not to be capable to find a job, which can help to reduce the unemployment. Firstly, if future workers were access to higher education systems, they could have throughout insight into these areas which can play a vital role in their career later on. Then, they could meet the requires that business organizations need, and the workers can go out of the unemployment. Secondly, developing the quality of learning performance of citizens can create more jobs. For example, in a country with the skilled workforce can attract more foreign enterprises to invest and expand theirs activates. It is likely to create more job opportunism to inner-national workers because they will have tend to employ employees of the country instead of other countries.
In conclusion, I completely dispute the opinion that nations in high unemployment should not make more efforts to offer secondary education to people who are not able to find a job. I argue that these countries should concentrate on providing higher education to their workers, especially those having no hope of finding a job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 857, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...national workers because they will have tend to employ employees of the country inst...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10669975186 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93883697081 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501240694789 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0708796482 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.058823529 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7058823529 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255830197425 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818218370868 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730035738982 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186499196069 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0931679180648 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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