Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many people suppose that the government should spend expenditure on talented artists, while others believe that they should be supported financially by substitutable funding. In my opinion, gifted ones should be funded by both authorities and other organizations.
Several individuals are persuaded that governments should allocate their resources to funding for artistic professionals. Since they make significant contributions to the improvement of culture which is a crucial aspect of the existing of a nation. The government can hold music competitions for musicians and singers, which could encourage them to devote their music aptitudes and then create a more abundant culture. In addition, it is totally justified if national funding is allocated to supporting painters and musicians due to the boom of artistic industries in recent years. It is likely that investing in these sectors properly could create an immense income for nations.
However, others think that excellent artists should be gotten financial support from commercial or non-government organizations. The first reason is that the government has to allocate scared resources to funding for other social problems such as health, education. It is starved of money that authorities invest a large amount of money in artists when the country is in poor conditions. Secondly, private funding for artistic activities is usually much larger compared to subsidies of the government. For example, an entertaining company can organize a live concert with large scale containing hundreds even thousands of audiences. It seems that these corporations are more able to advertise talented artists and bring their excellent works of arts to more public.
In conclusion, while many people argue that talented musicians and painters should be invested by the government, others think that it is better that investments in art come from other organizations. However, I am convinced that all of them should collaborate to support better artists.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to funding for artistic professionals. Since they make significant contributions to ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... collaborate to support better artists.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59539473684 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05893285384 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569078947368 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0630899229 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.4 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301891820897 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10426251623 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896120986097 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199577352082 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073712079715 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.2 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.