With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Should we encourage the art area?
In today’s world, most countries have shown great concern about art. Controversy exists as to due to the amenity of technology and science, whether there is no value of artists such as musicians and painters. However, I am totally convinced that there are many benefits artists bring to our life which scientists cannot do.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to this view is that artists can affect the emotion of normal people through their performances. One example to demonstrate this view is that Mozart’s music helps people feel relieved and motivated. Moreover, this type of music can control emotions and switch them in a positive way. For this reason, artists might bring any plus sides to the emotion of people.
In addition, one explanation to support this view is that musicians have a bigger impact on peoples’ behaviour than scientists. This is shown by the following example. In Vietnam, when people read the information related to environmental problems that were updated by people working in the scientific field, there was a little change in their actions to protect the environment. In contrast, many musicians organized their performances to encourage people to participate in activities regarding the environment. Consequently, there was a large number of young people taking part in protecting the environment. Therefore, it is obvious that musicians are relatively influential with normal people.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that artists still have a certain influence on our life in this day and age, such as improving humankind's emotions and changing their behaviours. As a result, I share the view that the arts should be motivated more because of its benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, as to, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31407942238 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94213859989 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584837545126 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8176552513 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4666666667 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241000573219 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739758517383 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558897000398 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141906593801 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757238956187 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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