Do you agree or disagree with the statement: “Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past?
Tied with the Technology Revolution, forms of entertaining are getting more creative and diverse. As a result, a person’s life appears to be much more convenient and comfortable. In contrast, there is a recent debate discussing about a paradox that people in current are less happy than they were despite modern facilities. In my view, I totally approve that: Human are no longer as satisfied as they used to be.
On the one hand, the terrible power of money turns out to be a mirror reflecting the artificial and expensive of one’s heart. In the present economic conditions, no one can bravely state that they can live without money, which defines the importance of the dollars in life. That’s why people are willing to exchange their feelings, views and even themselves to the papers printed currency on it. In fact, even-changing society is a devil day by day killing the kind, truth and happiness. Money can make one love one, but also one leave another. Furthermore, efforts to make money do often makes parents forget their family and the adult forget the basic happiness of life. Hence, although we can live without worrying about a rainy day, we could hardly feel happy and satisfied as we were used to be.
On the other hand, the fast-growing society itself burdens the generations with the pressure and loneliness. Students who are regarded as future of nations have to spend hours every single day to studying and many feels lost when they cannot catch up to the other. As a result, the number of students decide to suicide as a way to free from pressure is higher over the years and Korea is the most obvious evident. Otherwise, the invention of social networking brings back insidious effects on human. People who rely too much on social networks are easy to feel lonely, although they chat with their friends every day. Some has a strong desire to come back to their childhood, when with just 500 dong they can buy a snack, when friendship are childlike and passionate than ever to find happiness that they find nowhere in the current life.
In conclusion, the even-changing world is a two-edged weapon, it on one side can help lives to be more convenient and livable but on another side brings a lot of drawbacks. It is the change of society that creates its own beauty but also drowns billions of people desiring to be taken back to basic happiness in past in dissatisfaction and solitude.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 800, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
...dly feel happy and satisfied as we were used to be. On the other hand, the fast-growing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, so, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80906921241 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65520822607 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55369928401 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2069738816 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.052631579 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20832979733 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561624343577 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499447085943 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122998601618 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258912141654 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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