Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past”
“After all, the world is flat”. It is the true that our world is changing tremendously whether we will it or not. Skeptics doubt that our happiness is going down despite the rise of innovation in many fields of life. From my point of view, such kinds of changes bring a fulfilling happiness to humans.
In the first place, the idea of being happy even if we have to live in a circumstance that is lack of modern devices seems to be so strange. Our basic instinct is to question about everything. Dating back to the age of ancient Greek, countless philosophers had wondered about how our world function. Then they did invent a number of inventions that made our life more convenient. The curiosity is our box of Pandora. Human did dream of flying beneath the azure sky, diving deeper and deeper in the ocean, or even more insane to travel among the stars. We all know the story “the fall of Icarus” that mentions the extremely powerful desire to fly as the birds. It is not only a folk but also a mirror reflecting our yearning. Indeed, we may not never break our limits or achieve the most insane dream without the support of technology. But we did success thanks to the change fueled by science. For example, the moment when the brothers of Wrights flew across the sky could be the happiest moment of mankind since human will be no longer pin our feet on the ground. The world used to be a quiet place filled with its simple happiness. However, the humble blissful could never satisfice human’s imagination. Living in the past could truly drive humans unsatisfied.
On another aspect, the modern world in which we live could be considered as a magical chest waiting us to unseal. Nowadays, human could experience countless activities that our ancestor could not even imagine. It is absolutely a great joy to travel around the world, experience the culture, people, and cuisine from every corner of our society. To our previous generations, these kinds of ideas seem to be unbelievable. In addition, skeptics doubt that the tremendous changes could threat our traditional values. They blame globalization, a prime example of change, as the main reason to cause humanity down. However, globalization is not a hazard but a blessing from technology. In fact, it facilitates the poor countries to speed up in path of innovation. For example, globalization has changed deeply the poverty, the racism, and the unbalance of sexes. That is the typical example of a world which is changing itself. I do believe that those who fear the unknowns will fear the changes. For changes is humans’ journey against the ignorance. Motivated by our knowledge, it is deserved to believe that the world of changes facilitates human to achieve happiness in the highest level.
In conclusion, even if the wind of change might not carry only the good, it is unacceptable to declare that we could have a happier life in the past. I do trust in the benefits brought by a world which is changing itself tremendously. I do trust in the highest level of happiness that humans have ever experienced.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, after all, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 533.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83489681051 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75806179742 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521575984991 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9318586778 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7941176471 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6764705882 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67647058824 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14456805053 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04056929128 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424274675329 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106487929141 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213032470213 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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