Due to the development and rapid expansion of the supermarket in some countries, many small, local business unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agre

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Due to the development and rapid expansion of the supermarket in some countries, many small, local business unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, supermarkets are rapidly growing as a consequent, small businesses are not in position. Some people are of the view that local communities will soon end, due to the failure of the local business. I, however completely disagree with the premise and in this essay, I will outline my justification for this.

To begin with, supermarts are essential for the localities due to the fact that it helps the locals to bloom and blossom. This goes in a way that marts provide numerous facilities which include cinema, food court, play area, shopping area, parking and so on. These amenities enable the native population to mingle more frequently. For instance, my friend and I arranged a small get together for our school mates in a shopping mall, which was recently opened in my vicinity.

In addition to this, huge marts are well equipped with a wide range of products as compared to local vendors. The native vendors, through a partnership with giant malls, can reap the huge benefit from them, by placing their product in their shelves this will boost their business profit. As a result of the partnership, a local product of natives not only recognize nationwide but also at an international level by the customers. The fantastic example of this is the local shop next to my house, they sell supreme quality rice, with the co-partnership with supermarts, now they are selling their rice worldwide and hence increasing their profits.

Therefore, in conclusion, I am not agreed with the opine that the native community will be end owing that closure native business. In fact, community and as well as the nation will prosper promptly as the marts developed. In the future, shopping malls will be one stop shop for all where people will eat, entertain and trade.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.687127752 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3992534223 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206516999757 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829668364169 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966884418108 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143127026493 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110515469453 0.056905535591 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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