Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Small business are not able to take competition with the increasing number of developed supermarkets in some countries. It is thought by some that local communities will be near to death as a result of the extinction of private business. In my opinion, the absence of local business will not bring local communities to death while it can cause some problems to them.
Local communities may not disappear due to the extinction of local business. People can communicate and meet each other in other places such as bars and recreation centers. Furthermore people from local communities easily can buy necessary products and groceries from big supermarkets. In additional, they may spend there their free time, as modern supermarkets offer people places for leisure activities. Moreover modern supermarkets have delivery services, through them people can order needful products.
On the other hand, people will go less to the neighborhoods if there is no small shops, bakehouse or coffee shops as a result people will not communicate with their neighbors on a daily basis and will not be able to get to know new comers. Furthermore, streets can become empty and boring without local businesses. People can face some problems if they need to buy special product urgently. For instance, during the cooking process any person can realize that he does not have a salt and it would not be too fast to get it as he should go far to nearest supermarket or order it through delivery service.
In conclusion, people may face some problems due to absence of small business but it will not cause the extinction of local communities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 7.85571142285 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1357.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02592592593 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82771168275 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0214449137 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.384615385 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331222691552 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134821911402 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105907592768 0.0667982634062 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25070949787 0.151304729494 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119507760855 0.056905535591 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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