A family has a great influence on children’s development, but the outside of home play a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree?
Children’s development are affected from both domestic rearing as well as social environment. Personally, I in terms of children’s character shaping and individual well-being in the future, family counts more than the outer environment.
It is commonly believed that the strong bond between parents and children easily builds up intimate relationship and thus equipping children the ability to feel and share love. As the children reared by authority organization such as hospital and orphanage tends to risk developmental impairment, especially in mental aspects. Fail to build a sense of belonging and deficient for evoking sympathy featuring in those kids who are deprived of their family in an early age. Despite the emotional deficiency, a child who is secluded from parents shows less social awareness when entering adulthood. While those born in a harmonious family and grow up with careful upbringing often hold a positive attitude towards life and may easily feel satisfied and gratitude.
However, the experience from the outside, socializing and competition for example, develops the ability that emphasized by workforce and leadership. The comfort and peaceful atmosphere provided by family shows less helpful in terms of employable ability needed in workplace, and only through bruise and humiliation of stepping outside, can an individual eventually be regarded as grown up. But, the premise of whether an individual could successfully integrate into social life is that he/ she is capable of dealing with the negative impact of socializing or not, or more concisely, the influence of his/her family. Without a sound and healthy childhood experience, one more often than not encounter obstacle in friend-making and building fellowship. Therefore family shows a more far-reaching influence than the outside.
In conclusion, family education pose a vital impact on children’s future, it may less obvious than the sharp honing from social interaction, yet subtly determines the way an individual makes decision and behaviour.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...are affected from both domestic rearing as well as social environment. Personally, I in te...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... friend-making and building fellowship. Therefore family shows a more far-reaching influe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66774193548 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1252204917 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609677419355 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1830126888 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.153846154 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178979574506 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649976978784 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544252725079 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121118919638 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514262992329 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.