Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings but many of them lead unhappy lives Do you agree To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous

Essay topics:

Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree?

To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

‘’Famous’’ is the word that every child, teenager or even adult desire! Being a celebrity is a great dream that anyone wishes to become, well rumors say that a star is always moneyed. Actors and singers live in luxe and earn a great deal of money, but do they really seem happy as the screens show us?
First, well known people who are extremely wealthy can buy anything they want or impulse. Their faces pop-up on every single screen like social media, TVs in addition to magazine and newspapers. Stories about them always reveal that they are living the life of an Emperor, they gain all what they wish for from up-to-date luxurious cars, a big house sometimes a huge villa with more than one pool, also a lot of clothes and shoes with famous brands. Stars also have their own bodyguards, gets to go to anywhere they desire but above all they have the love of people (their fans). For example, actors are always and smiling in any interview or on any set even nowadays they post photos and stories about how extraordinary is the life they are having. But how about the off-screen life? Do they suffer like we do or they only have ups in their life?
Moreover, regular people like us tend to think that being famous is always a joyful life with no problems. But do you ever ask if stars do cry every night like we do? Do celebrities face any tough time with friends, family, emotions, and life in general? Well, we never had the chance to view that side of their lives even on TV shows like ‘Keeping up with the Kardashians’ they fight, argue cry but we know that they only acting on a set surrounded with plenty of cameras. Famous people are like us they face many problems they even lose things or people and they get sad or moody. Did you know that in order to be an actor or a singer there are many sacrifices that you should make? These kind of people sacrifice their family, time and even sometimes their identity just for the sake of getting famous. For example, Michael Jackson sold his identity to the illuminati in order to be a recognized celebrity and gain lots of money but when he started to wake up and began to speak against them, he got killed with a fake story regarding his excessive skin color change. So now did money make him happy?
To sum up, money can’t buy happiness and if anyone told you the opposite it’s just a big lie. This piece of paper can never buy you more time, neither bring you back someone you lost, nor make your inner soul contend. Stars are just normal humans like us they face many problems and even worse scenarios than we do. A simple life is always a happy life.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 685, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...e many sacrifices that you should make? These kind of people sacrifice their family, time ...
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Line 3, column 1104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hange. So now did money make him happy? To sum up, money can’t buy happiness and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, well, even so, for example, in addition, in general, kind of, you know, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 24.0651302605 249% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 484.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43801652893 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22202266898 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53305785124 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8575377224 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6363636364 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259592257505 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754900685016 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525972595194 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174083482904 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468109597544 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 12.4159519038 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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