In the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.

Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that in the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. In this essay, I strongly disagree with that statement. Because in this world there are so many amazing places that can be found and may be one of the dream places they want to visit in this life.
In the one hand, the main benefit of go on holiday in different country in the future is they are people need a new experience about holiday, it is because when they are want to explore another place in this world, they are must be go out from their country and prepare for holiday wherever they want to go. Secondly with holiday in different country, they are can improve the language skills and knowledge about the culture. However especially about holiday in another place far away from home, they are get an special experience which they will never forget. For the example, when they are want to know about price for some food or ticket of transportation they are need it, they are must using a local language for communicate with local people. As result that moment it’s so memorable when they are visit in another place.
However, there are some drawbacks of going on holiday in their own country is they cannot get new experiences about the beautiful places that must be visited in their countries. Moreover, they know that other places in their own country are boring and unpleasant to visit, because some places have high ticket prices and minimal maintenance. It is important that they are more experienced when visiting other places and get good memories.
To sum up, from where I stand, I believe that they are people who should go on vacation to other countries to get a lot of experience when they have time to vacation and get good memories.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...skills and knowledge about the culture. However especially about holiday in another pla...
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Line 2, column 509, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... place far away from home, they are get an special experience which they will neve...
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Line 2, column 749, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uage for communicate with local people. As result that moment it’s so memorable wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61128526646 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32811758392 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445141065831 0.561755894193 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.6914844474 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.583333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5833333333 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256481069474 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133606672056 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.203414067496 0.0667982634062 305% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186190129703 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110123366471 0.056905535591 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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