The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society How can this problem be solved

Essay topics:

The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing.
What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society?
How can this problem be solved?

It is believed that overweight is the main serious health problems due increasing the number of people who are at risk.

In this essay i would examine the reason of increasing number of people that has serious health problems due to being overweight and how to deal with it before coming to reasonable conclusion.

in the one hand, the reason of a rising number of people who are at risk of seroius health problems due to being overweight. firstly, many people like to eat unhealthy food for breakfast, lunch and even for dinner, because they don't have enough time to cook their food, they have to work erlier and back late night. for example junk food such us fried chicken, noodle, barbecue etc. secondly, in this era people do not like to excercise, because they has full of activity to study or work and also some people are lazy and prefer to play on their smartphone.

To tackle this problem firstly, the government should help the citizen to eat healthy food and the importance of healthy food for body, for example with advertising on television or in the main road ads. in addition, we should care about our self, and we just can start with a little exercise such as a stretching our hand, back, foot, and head. it jut need a little time to do so we can get back to our activity.

To sum up, in my opinion to overweight is not good at all and we should avoid this happen to us, if you have this problem you have more care about our self.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1192.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46441947566 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32420467388 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52808988764 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.9 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.9554043748 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.2 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434097330431 0.244688304435 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198853682415 0.084324248473 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208465877657 0.0667982634062 312% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298182797759 0.151304729494 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183034698887 0.056905535591 322% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 78.4519038076 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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