Government money should be used to support children in school for sports rather than to support professional sports and arts that perform for the general public. To what extent do you agree ?
Some people assert that government should encourage sports activity in schools more than funding and supporting the commercial sports and other art events in the country. In my opinion, I strongly agree on this matter and I will discuss both the views in this essay.
Education is the right of everyone and especially to unprivileged children. Every child should be respected for his unique identity in the society. To illustrate more, when a child is good at some sports but not doing well in his academics, shouldn't be ignored by us. There is a common mentality among people that children make success only by studying and getting a good job in future. However, for these reasons many schools are ignorant of extra-curricular activities. Moreover, a child develops his decision-making, reflexes, stamina, strength, planning, setting goal, etc when they are involved in some sports activity. Also, a child's natural talent will get polished since early age, which can further lead to a successful sports career. Thus, government should make sports compulsory in all the schools for everyone and aid them financially when necessary to encourage children's talent.
On the other hand, I firmly oppose the idea of government supporting professional sports and art events which are for the public. Such events already have big organizers helping them in every possible ways. Sports like I.P.L, FIFA, Cricket World Cup, etc and musical concerts are published globally and are more of a business and not true competition. These events already get an ample amount of funding from big companies in the name of advertising and marketing. Thus, they have enough money left even after paying off their event staffs. Furthermore, there is a good collection of money from the people attending these cricket matches and concerts due to high ticket prices. The only support they need from government is their permission to conduct the show.
In the end, I would reiterate that government money should be spent wisely in child education and development rather than giving it away to already funded sports and arts events.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: shouldn't
...ts but not doing well in his academics, shouldnt be ignored by us. There is a common men...
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Suggestion: in the future
...only by studying and getting a good job in future. However, for these reasons many school...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...oal, etc when they are involved in some sports activity. Also, a childs natural talent...
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...in every possible ways. Sports like I.P.L, FIFA, Cricket World Cup, etc and music...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18713450292 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70730550455 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573099415205 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3925400111 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5555555556 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34288277672 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0961898727068 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954732140057 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203810428314 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024969360329 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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