The government should spend money to encourage sports and arts in school children, rather than on professional sports and art performance for the general public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world, most countries have shown great concern about the development of sport and art. Controversy exists as to whether the government should pay money to encourage subjects related to sport and art at school instead of the professional performances for the public. From my point of view, I am utterly convinced that sport and art for students should be invested in more.
To begin with, the most frequent explanation to support this view is that sport at school has a positive impact on the cognitive skills of children such as: concentration and attention. This is shown by the following example. According to the information from the Healthline website, studies conducted over the past 40 years suggest that exercises in the classroom may help students stay on task and have a better attention span. Therefore, it is obvious that sport and art should receive more funds to enhance the development of students.
In addition, another factor contributing to this opinion is that a professional player could earn a large sum of money from their performances. Consequently, they should spend part their income to celebrate the activities or competitions by themselves, rather than expect the government to do that. In fact, according to the statistics about the salary of many football clubs over the world published recently, FC Barcelona earned $12 million after a match. Moreover, they had a record revenue of $959,3 million between 2018 and 2019. For this reason, it is clear that professional players are able to make a huge amount of money. As a consequence of this, they ought to pay for their performances.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that the government should invest more money in motivating sport and art for students at school instead of paying for skilled performances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1525.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11744966443 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94633356764 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573825503356 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6627914755 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.928571429 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351186325822 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110905313494 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111025265425 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220348488213 0.151304729494 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108750372789 0.056905535591 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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