Government should support prevention of the disease and lifestyle change rather than treatment of those who are ill.Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Government should support prevention of the disease and lifestyle change rather than treatment of those who are ill.
Do you agree or disagree?

It is important to consider how the government spent its resources. While others believe that it should fund the treatment of a disease, I argue with the opinion of others that most of the spending should be pour in disease prevention and healthy lifestyle.

To begin with, the government’s support in the prevention of an illness will benefit all people in the society. It will be best for the authorities to spend money on a health awareness programs that will encourage the people to live healthily and empowers them to participate in the community programs that will be focus on how to avoid certain chronic disease. For example, a recent health campaign in the United Kingdom entitled “A fruit in a day” reduced the growth of the people suffering from Diabetes by approximately 10%. This is a clear evidence that the government can effectively prohibit the occurrence of a disease by merely implementing an efficient program.

Furthermore, the cost of preventing a disease will provide less strain to the government expenditure. This is due to the fact that the treatment of a disease can cost as much as five times compared to the advertising campaign for its prevention. For instance, a recent study on the state budget of Queensland Australia in 2015 proved that the ratio of expenses on hospital treatment versus awareness campaign is nearly 4:1. This shows that the government can allocate more funds to other social services if they can save more money through health awareness programs.

In conclusion, although the government should maintain the health of its people, I believe that it is a better option if most of the fund allocation for health will be directed to an awareness program. It is recommended that this should be taken seriously to avoid a future damaging effect of people’s wellness.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'poured'?
Suggestion: poured
...ers that most of the spending should be pour in disease prevention and healthy lifes...
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Discourse Markers used:
['furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272997032641 0.247107183377 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.13353115727 0.155533422707 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0652818991098 0.0946595960268 69% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0237388724036 0.0501214627716 47% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0356083086053 0.0437548338989 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145400593472 0.122226691241 119% => OK
Participles: 0.026706231454 0.0403226058552 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94761785571 2.80594681477 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0356083086053 0.0326793684256 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.13649851632 0.0861772015684 158% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0415430267062 0.021408717616 194% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0118694362018 0.011925033212 100% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1839.0 1933.35771543 95% => OK
No of words: 303.0 316.048096192 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06930693069 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39603960396 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.300330033003 0.28420135186 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.237623762376 0.203846283523 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.148514851485 0.137316102897 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94761785571 2.80594681477 105% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.037074148 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50495049505 0.56093040696 90% => OK
Word variations: 50.5815013223 60.7387585426 83% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 25.25 20.7743622355 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5016812568 49.517814964 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.25 127.492653851 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7743622355 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.814263465372 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 55.2830033003 49.1944974215 112% => OK
Elegance: 2.30769230769 1.69124875643 136% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257711922 0.332605444948 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.147574781652 0.102741220458 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.056508956091 0.0668466124924 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.630460853921 0.534860350844 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131589869969 0.148594505496 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138237325497 0.134430193775 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745824601515 0.0742795772207 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449739889212 0.324371583561 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0697682780206 0.0638462369009 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210915030371 0.228012699653 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580477291381 0.058150111329 100% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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