The Growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in a effort to deal withthe health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the

Increasing number of overweight people is dragging helath care system in trouble. It is thought by some that key to slove this issue is to introduce sports and teaching on physical education in school circulum. In my opinion, i completely agree that this is the best way to tackle with the issue of public health with respect to overweight.

Firstly, introducing sports and extracircular activities in schools brings awareness among children how to tackle with the health issues such as obesity and makes them fit and healthy. This results in fitness and also makes them to maintain correct diet. At this moment, Schools rarely have sports classes dialy or once in two days which is not resulting in reduction of obesity. So it will be helpful if schools focus mostly on fitness and sports which helps the younger generation to be more fit.

Secondly, parents also need to take part in encouraging their children to play sports and do fitness activities by taking them out to sport areas and play ground to play games in the mornings or in the evenings which also helps them to get fresh and be fit by playing sports. vice-versa it also helps parents in their children are sporty which makes both of them to involue in sport activites and be fit. parents should teach in home about obesity and the health issues it causes so they will be aware of it and be part of sporty activities.

To conclude, the owing problem of overweight will be reduced if their is a change in the life sytle of the younger generation by introducing sports and physcial education in schools.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, such as, in my opinion, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1303.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75547445255 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50854206919 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514598540146 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7982149693 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.454545455 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9090909091 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172790596482 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858524407078 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821341556392 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141592316982 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140162360355 0.056905535591 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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