Health impacts of limited outdoor space.
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There is an increase in the number of people living in homes with small or limited outdoor space as the urban population grows. It has a negative impact on the psychology and physical health of human beings.
To begin with, living in a house with a small or limited outdoor space has various disadvantages.Firstly, people may suffer from illnesses associated with respiratory disease because this type of house has fewer vents to circulate air, causing the germs and viruses to be trapped. In addition to this, they are likely to be affected by problems related to mental health, such as depression, anxiety, and so on, since individuals live in houses with little outdoor space.For example, according to a recent study, those who live in houses with large open spaces are less likely to suffer from illnesses related to mental health compared to those who live in houses with limited outdoor space.
Moreover, if people are living in houses with limited outdoor space, they are likely to become lazy.since not having outdoor space makes people less productive because they do not do physical activity, and hence they may suffer from obesity. For instance, the World Health Organization revealed that 33 percent of the global population lives a sedentary lifestyle because of a lack of outdoor space.Further more, it is responsible for the decrease in immunity of humans since human beings are little or not exposed to sunlight.As a consequence, they are likely to be more affected by various diseases.For example, 45% of teenagers suffer from health issues because they are not exposed to sunlight.
To sum up, this is a negative development because the trend of having houses with limited outdoor space is responsible for mental and physical illnesses.
Please check this and give me bands according to my performance
Based on your writing, I would say your overall performance is satisfactory. You have presented your ideas clearly and used examples to support your points. However, there are some areas where you could improve.
Firstly, your introduction could be more concise and focused. Try to avoid using vague language like "various disadvantages" and instead, clearly state the negative impacts of living in a house with limited outdoor space.
Secondly, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings in your writing. For example, the sentence "since individuals live in houses with little outdoor space" could be revised to "because individuals are living in homes with limited outdoor space."
Lastly, you could expand on your points and provide more evidence to support your claims. For instance, you could cite specific studies or statistics to strengthen your argument.
Overall, I would give your writing a band score of 6.5 to 7 out of 9 in terms of the IELTS Writing Band Scale.
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What improvement I need ?
Based on your writing sample, here are some suggestions for improvement:
Focus on using more concise language and avoiding vague or general statements.
Work on improving your sentence structure to avoid awkward phrasings and grammatical errors.
Expand on your points and provide more specific evidence to support your claims.
Consider organizing your writing more effectively, for example, by using clear topic sentences and supporting details.
Read and practice writing more to improve your vocabulary and overall writing skills.
Consider getting feedback from a tutor or teacher who can provide more targeted suggestions for improvement.
Overall, with practice and targeted feedback, you can continue to improve your writing skills and achieve your desired score.
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Can you write sample essay on this topic by adding my ideas from my eassy
Sure, here's a sample essay on the topic that incorporates your ideas:
As the urban population grows, there is an increase in the number of people living in homes with small or limited outdoor space. This trend is having a negative impact on the psychology and physical health of human beings, as individuals living in such homes are more susceptible to respiratory illnesses, mental health problems, and a lack of physical activity.
Firstly, limited outdoor space in homes can lead to respiratory problems as there are fewer vents to circulate air, leading to the accumulation of germs and viruses. Additionally, studies have shown that individuals living in homes with large open spaces are less likely to suffer from illnesses related to mental health such as depression and anxiety. This is because individuals living in homes with limited outdoor space may feel claustrophobic and trapped, leading to feelings of stress and anxiety.
Furthermore, living in a home with limited outdoor space can lead to a lack of physical activity, making individuals more susceptible to health issues such as obesity. According to the World Health Organization, 33% of the global population lives a sedentary lifestyle due to a lack of outdoor space. This trend also leads to a decrease in immunity as individuals are not exposed to sunlight. Lack of exposure to sunlight has been linked to increased health problems, as 45% of teenagers suffer from health issues because they are not exposed to sunlight.
In conclusion, the trend of having houses with limited outdoor space is responsible for mental and physical illnesses. To combat this negative trend, policymakers should consider the importance of outdoor space and include it in urban planning. This can be done by increasing the number of parks, community gardens, and other outdoor spaces to ensure that everyone has access to green spaces that improve physical and mental health. Additionally, individuals can take steps to improve their physical and mental health by incorporating physical activity into their daily routine, even if they don't have access to outdoor space. By taking these steps, individuals can mitigate the negative effects of living in a home with limited outdoor space.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 37.0 10.4138276553 355% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 24.0651302605 262% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 151.0 41.998997996 360% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 24.0 8.3376753507 288% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 5162.0 1615.20841683 320% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 961.0 315.596192385 305% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3714880333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.56776436283 4.20363070211 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81828497356 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 338.0 176.041082164 192% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351716961498 0.561755894193 63% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1608.3 506.74238477 317% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.10420841683 475% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 16.0721442886 243% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.7775166434 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.358974359 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.641025641 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.97435897436 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.38176352705 593% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 22.0 3.9879759519 552% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293804516507 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867762884115 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757142064787 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891213414129 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837096338594 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 182.0 78.4519038076 232% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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