Humans tend to copy one another, especially in fashion, choice of clothes and consumer goods. Do you agree or disagree? Provide your view and examples from your own experience
Fashion is striding by leaps and bounds in this modern world. It is argued that imitation of each other in terms of wearing clothing, footwears, glamorous objects, buying clothes is in trend these days. Here, I would like to accord with given statement.
There are numerous points to shore up given statement. First and foremost, watching advertisements plays a terrific role to encourage everyone to buy same latest things that are coming in the supermarkets. Thus, trend of copying is on the rise. Moreover, there is a great influence of celebrities and fashion industries on people to make them follow their trend and style. For example, a massive proportion of masses tend to wear clothes, jewelry, use cosmetics and specs to look like their favourite stars. Therefore, people are in the rat race of imitation.
Furthermore, a strong competition among society members to show their status is stimulating everyone to have luxury and modern goods. As a result, similarity is existing in the way of living standard. Adding to it, youngsters these days are more passionate to outshine their peers and collegues. According to me, youngsters are always mesmerized by the eye catching hair styles and accessories worn by fashion icons. Therefore, they automatically start following the attractive styles similar to their idols.
On the contrary, others have conflicting views. They think that, every individual has his/her own unique style of dressing or clothing. They are happy and contented with their wardrobe choices are not allured by any fashionistas. Moreover, the people who are sensible enough always take notice of their pocket and only go for economic choices rather than blindly following others.
To recapitulate, in this dazzling world, there is no room for outdated persons. So, everyone is bound to remain up to date in order to match up with the society.
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Essay evaluation report
It is a good one.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1520 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.675 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.464 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.242 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.042 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Fashion is striding by leaps and bounds in this modern world...
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Line 5, column 297, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
... to outshine their peers and collegues. According to me, youngsters are always mesmerized by th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22442244224 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78988983281 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633663366337 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2012085434 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.15 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.15 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0582902472431 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0158940433524 0.084324248473 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0170741639294 0.0667982634062 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0294114088317 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159158960123 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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