The increase in people life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement One alternative is that people start work at younger age Is this alternative positive or negative statement

Essay topics:

The increase in people life expectancy means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement. One alternative is that people start work at younger age. Is this alternative positive or negative statement.

In modern era, everyone want to build their career and live luxury life so that people start work at younger age and some individuals have to work older to pay for their retirement. This motion have both pros and cons. I would like to discuss both views in the furthering paragraphs.
To begin with, there are plethora of positive effects that masses start their work at younger age because they want to achieve their goals as soon as possible. If masses work at their younger age they get more experience and good financial conditions. For example, in Canada, most teenager work in their teen age because they want to live good life in their future and they also want savings to build their career.
On the flip side, there are numerous negative impact on the youngsters to work on their younger age. If individuals start their work at younger age, it is more harmful for masses because when they will do this, they have been under a lot of stress. Whereas, they have also pressure on their studies or work. For example, last year in Germany, a student try to got suicide die to under a stress. Because he had more pressure on his studies and work. Therefore, if masses do this, it also effects on their mental ability.
To sum up, my opinion is that, youngsters do not work on their teen age because if they work on that age, it is effect on their health and they could many problems due to this.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...o pay for their retirement. This motion have both pros and cons. I would like to dis...
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Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'teenager' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: teenager
...ial conditions. For example, in Canada, most teenager work in their teen age because they wan...
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Line 2, column 305, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: teenage
... in Canada, most teenager work in their teen age because they want to live good life in ...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'pressured'.
Suggestion: pressured
... lot of stress. Whereas, they have also pressure on their studies or work. For example, ...
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Line 4, column 64, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: teenage
...s that, youngsters do not work on their teen age because if they work on that age, it is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49803921569 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20657156989 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494117647059 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 354.6 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5231701196 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2307692308 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418967258497 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167004644325 0.084324248473 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107606841095 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282908889961 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429368114717 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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