Whether students should accommodate their own living quarters or stay with their own family has been a heated controversy these days. While i acknowledge that there are many favorable incomes associated with the practice of living at home, i am firmly of the view that it is ideal to get separated from family at this time.
On the one hand, people who advocate the idea that students should live at home with their parents have their own justifications. Staying with parents guarantees students' financial security. Student do not have to bother with the costs of basic necessities namely food, water bills, and accomodation water bills. A large number of students boarding at some places near school have to exert themselves with many kinds of part- time jobs to be able to afford for rental and daily expenses. What is more, under the guidance and supervisions of parents, these young adolescents would not be apt to get themselves into the scrape or develop disruptive behaviors by bad influences from their peers.
I personally believe that starting a period with complete freedom from parental care poses distinctive benefits. First and foremost, living far from home exposes students to the harsh realities with insurmountable problems that they will soon face in the future. As a result, students would develop a certain vital skills ranging from time management skills to problem solving strategy in order to be self- reliant. Furthermore, such considerable changes in accomodation could help them gain insights into the new place and people, which is pre- eminent for their maintaining harmony with the new life and self development.
In conclusion, each option has their own advantages and disadvantages. It seems to me that on the whole the advantages of venturing to the outside world on young adults are much more weightier than the drawbacks based on the wide range of merits it offers in terms of personal and academic development. However, it is safe to say that it is subjective to each individual's perspectives to decide which is optimal a solution for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... a heated controversy these days. While i acknowledge that there are many favorab...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ed with the practice of living at home, i am firmly of the view that it is ideal ...
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Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...do not have to bother with the costs of basic necessities namely food, water bills, and accomodat...
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Line 2, column 313, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...er bills, and accomodation water bills. A large number of students boarding at some places near s...
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Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
... students would develop a certain vital skills ranging from time management skills to ...
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Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'weightier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: weightier
... outside world on young adults are much more weightier than the drawbacks based on the wide ra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the whole, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08187134503 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79859237556 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608187134503 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3068423767 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.142857143 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314183637632 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098372839001 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711298469625 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176600335637 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858302123311 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.