It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both of views and give your opinion.
The role artists play in modern society is often debated topic . On the one hand, people see art and sport as critical components to a society image and sense of identity .The beliefs and values of young people are shaped through a myriad of influences. Among the most major of these are a child's parents and teachers. However, it is argued that some children have more artistic skills than others on the intellectual and social developments of children. this will be shown by looking at how students are more attentive when interacting with teachers and how trainers engage young people in an environment more conducive to practice sports and playing music in early stage.
Firstly, teachers have the opportunity to interact with their students during period of the day when young people are more attentive. To illustrate, An American study once proved that human beings more readily commit new skills and ideas, playing music and practicing activities to memory in the morning as opposed to the afternoon or evening. As teachers spend five mornings a week with the children, this example makes it clear that they have an advantage over parents when it comes to developing a young person's mind. Thus it is clear teachers affect the intellectual and social growth of a child in a manner that child's parents cannot match so that child can be learn new habits.
In addition to this, the classroom environment is a powerful place that puts a child in a frame of mind that encourages learning, developing new skills and practicing more sports. For example it has been proven that students who are talented tend to have more difficultly than classroom taught students in absorbing the information their instructor presents to them. It is argued that disparity exists because a classroom surrounds students with an environmental of academia, as this sort of environment is not always present in a child's home , it is clear that teachers and trainers are in many ways more influential than anyone in expanding a child's mind
After looking at the above, it can be seen that instructors have advantage over parents(anyone else) when it comes to forming the minds of children . it is thus expected that the traditional classroom style of learning every ting will not be drastically altered in the foressable future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, so, thus, for example, in addition, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00779220779 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71646427925 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516883116883 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.8428570817 49.4020404114 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.307692308 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6153846154 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160271497958 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553100071712 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030546013332 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940517406641 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375556689699 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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