It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are still many people living with a plethora of disadvantages all around the world in these days. Meanwhile, many people argue whether the aiding concentration should be put on the national population or not. From my point of view, instead of focusing on one own’s country, every nation should lend their hands in their extent to help those in difficulties, no matter where they are from.
First of all, if the disadvantaged can benefit from foreign helps, they will both gain the advantages. The aid from other countries, especially the rich, can reduce the burden on the local communities. For example, many developing countries in Asia have been receiving the ODA funds from the developed ones, like Japan and China, in order to deteriorate their national poverty. For the receivers, social problems, such as illiteracy and starvation, will gradually disappear. Then, those countries can produce a large number of high-quality workers for the industrialisation and modernisation in their countries and also the helpers. Consequently, it will improve the GDPs as well as the living conditions in developing countries. For the helpers, they can attain several prosperities such as cheap but excellent labours leading to higher profits and the stability of their neighbors as well as the helper’s.
Besides, helping others is moral duties for everyone with no exception. As a results, the United Nations have established many international committees with the support of nealy 200 countries to assist spontaneously those facing with difficulties. For example, the Red Cross has shown their essential roles those where a natural catastrophy, such as tsunami, occurs. In this way, we help make the world better.
In conclusion, each government should have an appropriate policy on helping the disadvantageous in the world with their greatest capabilities. As a result, we can prevent the global crisis on economy as well as politics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, so, still, then, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37459283388 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09483282544 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605863192182 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.189861045 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.125 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3125 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177952987305 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558397228744 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546851218187 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118649377756 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755432220546 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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