It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Hitherto, globalization has led to the difference in lifestyles among residents which leads to a variety of physical diseases. The question of whether the government should pay more attention to treat patients or shield their residents to become would-be patients or not has been appealing public concerning. While people agree that treatment is the best option, I totally gravitate toward to latter by giving some rational evidence.
It is conspicuous that spending money on medical facilities is the best short-term choice. The government’s budget absolutely can adapt to the demand for medicines; however, they can not keep that stable for too long, if the number of physical relating cases keeps surging, the supporting money will run out completely. Furthermore, some infectious illnesses can pose a serious threat to the public, a vivid example is that in this day and age, VN is now facing with Coronaviruses which have deprived millions of lives. Notwithstanding the government’s effort all most hospitals located in Red zones are now overloaded, having recognized an unadaptable heath budget, the authorities introduced an isolation rule in order to deter residents from getting the illness.
On the other hand, seldom do people get the disease when they have a healthy lifestyle, scientists proved that a person who has a good immune system can avoid serious illnesses like a heart attack or mentally-related. Hence, authorities must spend money on encouraging residents to work out, especially people living in a cosmopolitan city, who are always occupied with tons of works and deadlines. This will positively reduce the disease rate among citizens and vanish the treatment budget pressure for authorities. On economic standpoint, possessing a medical machine costs much more than promoting an event to pursue people to work out, as soon as people’s attitude toward doing exercise is resilient, the average money spending on medicine will reduce remarkably.
All things considered, instead of paying for medicine, the government should encourage residents to work out so as to develop a healthy lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: Whether; The question whether
...eads to a variety of physical diseases. The question of whether the government should pay more attentio...
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Line 4, column 110, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... should encourage residents to work out so as to develop a healthy lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, if, so, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43202416918 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04445391302 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628398791541 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.4120294716 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.833333333 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215401932188 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686666834534 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506080166429 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106360626282 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076150790248 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.