It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture from other people We can learn as much as from books films and the Internet To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture from other people. We can learn as much as from books, films and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that individuals can acquire the knowledge of different cultures from books, films, and the Internet rather than traveling to actual places. I totally disagree with this opinion since learning from these materials hardly fully reflects the culture and makes readers feel frustrated about cultural places.

The main reason why I do not believe individuals may learn about other nations' cultures through materials without going to such places is that learning from films and the internet can not show the full content. This means they can not feel the whole culture thereby surfing the internet or watching movies. To illustrate, it is impossible for people who watch films or browse the internet to have a taste and smell of Vietnamese specific cuisines unless they travel to this country and try those foods themselves.

Another reason why I do not support the notion that learning about another nation's culture can be obtained by reading books is that reading books makes people feel frustrated . This means that the book is written by many authors with different ideas so it will not have a certain information and the false information will make readers misunderstand about the culture of that country. For example, when reading Vietnamese books, many people think that Vietnam has a lot of terrorism and full of social evils but if they have the opportunity to travel this country, they will see Vietnam as a beautiful and attractive country.

In conclusion, I completely disagree that individuals may learn about various cultures through books, films, and the Internet without going to travel to other places. This is because learning from these reference materials do not show full content and make readers feel depressed about those cultural places.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20138888889 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51757629383 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482638888889 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.3142467815 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.8 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365974216415 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155767419138 0.084324248473 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079775875081 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243041263928 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592989511788 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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