It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. What do you think is the reason for a growth in the rate of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

Essay topics:

It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. What do you think is the reason for a growth in the rate of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

Many people believe that the increasing number of youth crime is associated with the widely spread physical scenes in media. In my opinion, this is one of the causes among in many reasons, and I believe that good parenting and a stronger juvenile legal system can prevent minors from embarking on a life of crime.

To begin with, there are two main reasons for the accelerating rate of youth violation. Firstly, parents are too busy with work, which they are not being able to spend enough time with their children. Without the supervision and care, teenagers do not feel the need to stay at home , as a result, they end up being on the streets and entertain themselves in a way that can excite them , such as stealing. Secondly, the punitive measures for adolescence are not strong enough to stop them from committing crimes. The penalties for young individuals are totally different from adults when it is dealing with the same crime. In many countries, the sanctions for teenagers are considered to be warning rather than actual punishment.

In order to deal with the situation,I think that the incidence of youth crime can be reduced through good parenting and a strengthen juvenile legal system. Parents play an important role in the growth of teenagers. If parents spend more time to connect with their children and get to know their friends, teenagers are unlikely to feel bored and isolated from family. Meanwhile, strict penalties should be introduced aimed at punishing young offenders, in particular, the repeat offenders, as I believe that this will be an effective way to minimise and deter the crime intention of young people.

To conclude, the increasing number of youth offenders are driven by the lenient juvenile legal rules and distance relationship between young individuals and parents, good parenting and deterrent penalty are the key solutions to solve this problem.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, i think, in particular, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0607028754 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66605435147 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565495207668 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0759561583 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.846153846 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92307692308 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260476875075 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897762547598 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577496284907 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151716679213 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367233500052 0.056905535591 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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