It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them in prison so that they can find a job after they leave prison. To what extent do you agree?

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It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them in prison so that they can find a job after they leave prison. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about how ex-prisoner able to reintegrate back into society and becoming productive members of the community. I agree with the view that educating prisoners to help them more straightforward to find a job after leaving prison is an eminent method to reduce crimes.
First, it is obvious that low literacy which leads to the lack of employment opportunities, is the main reason of, crime. Indeed, an enormous number of people commit crime because of poverty and the needs of providing families in the unemployment context due to the fact less educated persons hardly find a job and earn money legally. That might be the reason to commit a crime in the first place and manifest engender repeat crimes after serving prison sentence if ex-prisoner could not find a job to provide basic needs of living. This is a crucial action to teach offenders technical and practical skills to help them find a job later and prevent them to turn to crime again.
Second, not only does educate prisoners to provide reformed prisoners a superior way to live, but society also reaps huge fruits from ex-prisoners who becoming an effective workforce. In fact, many employers have sophisticated hands-on skills and greatly contribute to social benefits such as construction workers, handmade producers, electrical workers and so on. In results, ex-criminals who have a chance to make profits and provide financial needs by themselves no longer were forced to violate laws for money, thus diminishing crime significantly.
In conclusion, reducing crime by imparting knowledge to prisoners makes tremendous advantages for both prisoners and society by eliminating the deep cause of criminal manners and prevent them from happening again in the future.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... thus diminishing crime significantly. In conclusion, reducing crime by imparting...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24475524476 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88938152556 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632867132867 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 30.2125801613 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308970819743 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119227456605 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708176382008 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184799751837 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333044480414 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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