Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Most packaged foods and beverages comprise sugar as the key ingredient in large amounts which can be deleterious to health. Increasing the price of such products to discourage consumption is an idea that I believe should not be adopted and I completely disagree with it.
Firstly, people can only control their craving for sweet food when they are aware of the ill effects it causes. Even increasing the price will not stop people from consuming sweets as people who really want to consume their favourite candy or their favourite milkshake will not think twice before paying a higher price. For instance, people interested in exotic candies already pay exorbitant amount of money for them, increasing price will not affect such people. Even for commeners sweets are often the best gifts in almost all occasions and are seen as something mandatory on starting something new in many cultures. So people will be ready to pay a higher amount for the thing which is needed in every occasion. Hence, increasing the price is not a viable solution to this problem rather awareness about the ill effects of excess consumption should be promoted.
Secondly, sugary products provide us with a cheap source of energy as it contains a lot of carbohydrates breaks down quickly to give energy quickly. These are a go to snack for people who do labour intensive work or athletes. If we increase the price of such products the staple snack of a mason will change and can hinder his working capacity. Not only this it can detoriate an athletes performance over the period of time as he will want to go for pocket friendly alternatives and may not get the same result. Having such products on the market is important as it acts as a staple diet for many daily wage workers who can't afford costlier products to sasiate their hunger. Consequelty, Increasing the price will result in loss of food for a lot of such workers.
To conclude, I would say it is not ideal to increase the price of sugary products as they serve no real function; as only awareness can help control problems associated with excess consumption and such high calorie products are staple diet of a lot of poor people who will suffer the most if the change is made.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'athletes'' or 'athlete's'?
Suggestion: athletes'; athlete's
...city. Not only this it can detoriate an athletes performance over the period of time as ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...oriate an athletes performance over the period of time as he will want to go for pocket friend...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...le diet for many daily wage workers who cant afford costlier products to sasiate the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54546249667 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522077922078 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8219745074 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.2 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197110765613 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687274269143 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431295580888 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136284990294 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375377864767 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'athletes'' or 'athlete's'?
Suggestion: athletes'; athlete's
...city. Not only this it can detoriate an athletes performance over the period of time as ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...oriate an athletes performance over the period of time as he will want to go for pocket friend...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...le diet for many daily wage workers who cant afford costlier products to sasiate the...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54546249667 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522077922078 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.8219745074 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.2 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197110765613 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687274269143 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431295580888 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136284990294 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375377864767 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.