It is argued that there are a prevalence of processed food and drink products containing a considerable amount of sugar, which attributes to numerous illnesses. Therefore, some people contend that those products should cost more to detect sweet lovers from buying them frequently. Personally, I totally disagree with this point of view due to the following reasons.
It is true that sugary products are the causes of obesity, diabetes, and high blood pressure; however, people have the right to eat and drink whatever they want. In fact, sweets are not only favored because of its addictive taste, but also because it was scientifically proven to uplift humans’ spirits immediately. Accordingly, though clearly knowing some of the consequences that consuming sugary products can bring about, a lot of people still embrace great interest in this sinful pleasure, and as a result, it is truly unreasonable to take measures to prevent sweet lovers from their predilections. Moreover, since people are obsessed with something, it is tough to mitigate their obsession, even when they have some difficulties with individual finance. For instance, in Vietnam, bubble milk tea is always in great demand, especially among youngsters despite its relatively high cost (around 50,000 VND per cup). Nevertheless, when the milk-tea-holics were asked about why they spent such a significant amount of money on that kind of drink on a frequent basis without much hesitation, the same answers were recorded, which were simply because of their liking for it. This example clearly proves that less affordable cost cannot affect people’s sugar consumption.
Meanwhile, from my point of view, there are still some plausible measures to reduce individuals’ sugar intake. Firstly, the government can acknowledge the public more about the side effects of consuming high levels of sugar through schools, the media, and especially on the packaging of sweetened food and drink so that consumers can control their sugar consumption more effortlessly. In addition, sugar substitutes such as honey, some kinds of fruits, or diet sugar, which are able to ensure good health, can be promoted widely to enable consumers to have a wider range of choices and as a result, use less sugar.
In conclusion, the cost of sugary products should not be made higher because everyone has the right to choose what to eat freely without restrictions. Additionally, this measure is unable to solve the problems of excessive sugar intake completely as people would always prioritize their likings in spite of some obstacles. Instead, some other potential measures like bringing more information to the public or providing them more choices can be considered to foster a more healthy eating pattern.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ly. Accordingly, though clearly knowing some of the consequences that consuming sugary prod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33027522936 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8524808057 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571100917431 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4946578757 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.25 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1875 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304445895518 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094728376904 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687920932366 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192042572627 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462265489309 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ly. Accordingly, though clearly knowing some of the consequences that consuming sugary prod...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33027522936 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8524808057 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571100917431 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.4946578757 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.25 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1875 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304445895518 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094728376904 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687920932366 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192042572627 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462265489309 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.