Many museums charge for admission while others are free.Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?
Museum are the best place for the visitors coming from different countries in order that they could understand about historical stories, but people argue that whether or not charge for admission when they come to museums ? Personally, I think it would be better if they install charging for admission
In the one hand, I think that charging for admission when you come to museums is purely necessary. Firstly, paying fee brings many chance of generating money in order to offset investment from government. Money which gets from visitors could use for repairing museums or upgrading quality. For instance, most of museums have appeared for a long time and facilities is worse. Thus government could use money for making it better. Another reason is that charging for admission make people have awareness definitely. If the visitors realize about historical priceless value, they will keep and recall it longer. For example, a considerable number of people are painting above the facilities without acceptance from manager due to bad awareness.
In my opinion, charging for admission is better than being free a charge but it has many problems as well. From paying fee, many museums take advantage of chance in order to raise the cost and make money illegally. For example, since 2 years ago, people argued that each person had to pay 100VNĐ for a ticket yet others had to pay only 50VNĐ. This could make foreign people have a bad reputation about country. Moreover, government should be free a charge for people who has special situation such as disabilities people , children under 10 years old or old people. This encourage people go sightseeing and prospect for significant information about history.
In conclusion, for reasons above this, I completely approve of charging for admission because of exact cause
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14527027027 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64885861488 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560810810811 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4351432211 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1875 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482068888182 0.244688304435 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164885070724 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120037505858 0.0667982634062 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326198505376 0.151304729494 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416974335562 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.