Many museums charge for admission while others are free.Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Opinions are divided as to whether museums should collect admission fee or not. In my opinion, any organization has their own expenditure, having profits will make sustainable activities. So that, I think museums those collecting fee have benefits to majority people.

We can see non-profit organizations around the world, helping poor people, funding by government. If museums do not collect entrance fee, we defined them as non-profit organizations. Typically, museums are great attraction place for traveler. Also, children get many benefits from those in term of education by collaborating with schools. However, it is impossible to run museums without profits continually. Therefore, many kinds of expenses are required, for example, assets deterioration, labor salary and electricity cost. If the organizations are not having any income, nothing can be assured that they will keep opening those in the next year. In reality, we can see many museums and zoos were closed due to lacking of budget even they got funding support from billionaires.

In order to keep museums running, entrance fees are one of the best solution, similarly when we visit national park. These museums are identified as business where they should not aim for only profits. People get benefit directly from these museums by having quality services and better facilities. As well, museums can make profits from foreign traveler very well. Therefore, people have to pay for what services we want in return, as long as entrance fee is not overpriced. Best museums in country always collect fee from visitors, for example, the ocean world in Okinawa charged about 30 us dollar, giving us best experience of sea life knowledge and entertainment, defining the best marine museum in the world whereas free entrance of classical cars museum in Thailand is giving good experience to elderly people, but most cars are damaged and the facilities are dirty.

In conclusion, I believe admission is necessity for running museums and their benefits are far better than other free museums.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, well, whereas, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33128834356 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82348591573 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592024539877 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9551472091 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5555555556 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28479134976 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869992779772 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551350559609 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176619464802 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480743309504 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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