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In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is this happening? How should they by punished?

Essay topics: In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is this happening? How should they by punished?

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It is true that juvenile delinquency has been on the increase in some countries these days. Reasons for this worrying trend vary and there are a range of possible punishments that could be applied.

To begin with, the upsurge in crimes committed by children and teenagers results from several reasons. Firstly, an underlying cause is the recent economic recession which forces today’s parents struggle harder to make ends meet. They consequently find themselves having less or even no time to look after their children. This plight may result in these vulnerable individuals associating with bad peers to find other source of care and thus, children are gradually led astray. Secondly, social media also play a part. In fact, the Internet, televisions have been bombarding children and teenagers with increasing amounts of violence, nudity, hedonistic lifestyles and so on. This bombardment could make them think that drug abuse, sexual harassment, fraud for example, are socially accepted. Therefore, they unconsciously commit more crimes.

Punishments for young criminals are various. Petty crime offenders should be forced to perform community service or participate in vocational schools specifically for criminals. The length of punishments can be reduced if they show positive changes in attitude. These two options not only create more social values but also offer them a chance of turning over a new leaf. After being released, young offenders must be kept under observation for a period of time. As for more serious crimes like mass murder, perpetrators must be sentenced to life imprisonment. This will definitely ensure a safe environment for citizens, an important factor to achieve social stability.

In conclusion, there are many reasons behind the increase in juvenile crime rates and the above-mentioned punishments deserve further consideration.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, for example, in conclusion, in fact, it is true, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56293706294 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93482473826 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695804195804 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8380766607 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3888888889 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8888888889 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215054444996 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646869794706 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619752259761 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106369095802 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569566704507 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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