Many people say that we now live in "consumer societies" where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that consumer culture has played a vital role in improving our life.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In our consumerist society material goods are fundamental. While quite a number of people give them too much importance, others use them in a sensible way. In this essay, I will discuss first why money and possessions can have a positive role in people’s lives, and why they can have a negative effect.
Salaries and material goods are fundamental to satisfy many basic needs, as well as pleasurable desires. It is undebatable that nearly the totality of services that people need such as transport, electricity and supplying of food have a cost in terms of money so that the necessity of owning money. For instance, living without electricity or money to buy food would be a serious problem for almost everyone. Hence, owning money to satisfy our needs is necessary, provided that the activity of earning money does not impede a person from having some free time.
Many people overwork in order to accumulate as much wealth as they can. According to sociologists, 45% of Americans overwork in order to buy goods that make them appear to have a high social status, such as a luxury car or designer clothes. Researchers from Harvard Medical School have found that there is a positive correlation between overworking and the increased risk of diseases such as diabetes, depression, and stroke. As a result, people who overwork in order to show off a higher social status then they hold may be less happy than before and increase the risk of acquiring certain diseases.
In conclusion, it is clear from my essay that although some material possessions are fundamental for people, other goods are symbols of vanity and power, causing some people to overwork and badly affect their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a sensible way" with adverb for "sensible"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, may, so, then, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9823943662 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72054157458 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580985915493 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6303374677 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139499227186 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543977798282 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401692481134 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869120765527 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561639454027 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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