Whether happiness should be deemed as personal responsibility or dependent on extrinsic factors has evolved as a heated contentious topic in social gatherings. Despite the arguments refuting the substantial role of personal skill in happiness, I am more convinced that external elements should be taken into consideration.
To commence with, the definition of happiness varies from person to person, regarding life expectancy, whereby people's requirements describe happiness. For example, suffering from health problems, physical impairments and being orphan, people are not dependent on materialistic issues to achieve life contentment which is an external matter. In order to seek happiness and life satisfaction, it seems that they are in the search of happiness beyond materialistic consideration, leading to their spiritual enrichment. This, in itself, can lay the foundation for instilling a sense of happiness apparently which is not closely linked to external factors like money.
On the other hand, Those who place a great emphasis on happiness due to extrinsic factor point to the importance of materialism in the life content. Simply put, Money and level of income play a useful part in giving a sense of security and happiness, meaning that provide people with peace of mind. A good illustration of this is clearly delineated by the more life satisfaction can be seen for individuals who meet their demands of shelter, food and clothes that that of less affluent ones. Added to this, the more job prospects and a higher level of social status, the more people possess complacent about their life. Therefore, a large proportion of happiness is devoted to external factors.
To conclude, while acknowledging the role of a person as a keystone of flourishing happiness, I would embrace that extrinsic factors have designed to be incorporated in our life to improve our happiness and make it achievable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10987495283 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586666666667 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.8293602449 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.25 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200952531157 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750519898656 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0215490883375 0.0667982634062 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111102149358 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565704154306 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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