Mobile phone and the internet could have many benefits for old people. However, this age group uses technology the least. What are the benefits for old people of using mobile phones and the internet? How can we encourage them to use this new technology?
In the digital age, it is becoming profoundly beneficial for elderly people to use electronic devices. However, the technological use among the old is relatively irrelevant. I believe that using tablets and smartphones can bring about numerous advantages to old people and there are many plausible methods to enhance their use rate.
First and foremost, it is undeniable that mobile phones and the Internet can have some positive impacts on the lives of old people. The first worth-mentioning fact is that electronic gadgets are useful means of communication. Unlike young people, most of the old population can not travel regularly to meet their friends or families, which greatly prevents them from social interaction. Thus, owning smartphones and using social medias can help them have conversations online with their loved ones. Another perk of technological devices is that they allow old people to store their crucial information. It is common knowledge that people at high ages can struggle memorizing things because their brains function less efficiently compared to those of young individuals. For example, if an old person has trouble in remembering his home address, he can write it down an online note and save it in his smartphone.
On the other hand, the measures to increase the use of electronic devices within the old community are not far-fetched. One pratical solution is that the young people in the families need to make effort to guide their prior generations on how to use smart gadgets and the Internet. If old people are provided with detailed guidance and support in using smartphones, eventually they will be able to use these technology proficiently and frequently. In addition, many hospitals and nursing homes also have to take action in rising the awareness of old people about the benefits of technology. This means that they can host events or activities related to fundamental use of the social medias or applications on phones and tablets. In this way, the old can realize the usefullness and necessity of smartphones and gradually make use of these technologies in their lives.
In conclusion, even though the use of smartphones and the Internet of the old-aged group is considerably low, I strongly believe that using these technologies can immensely benefit old people and there are many practical solutions can be implemented to improve this situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to memorize'.
Suggestion: to memorize
...e that people at high ages can struggle memorizing things because their brains function le...
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Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'these technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; these technologies
...es, eventually they will be able to use these technology proficiently and frequently. In additio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24155844156 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95014400282 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52987012987 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5283783661 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.705882353 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.49852487442 0.244688304435 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158976020861 0.084324248473 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794946661859 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339226001868 0.151304729494 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529306243203 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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