Multi societies in which there is a mixture of different ethnic people bring more benefits than drawbacks to country To what extent do you agree ar disagree

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Multi-societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic people, bring more benefits than drawbacks to country. To what extent do you agree ar disagree

It remains a controversy that whether a cosmopolitan society is more suitable for the thriving of a nation or not. In my opinion, I believe the diversity among the national cultures is beneficial in many aspects.
Apparently, It is multi-cultural societies that allow nations to develop sustainably in terms of economy. To begin with, the majority of immigrants from different cultural backgrounds are high achievers such as experts, investors, engineers, and other well-trained workers. As a result, their arrival means an inflow of expertise, experience, financial investments which contributes to the dynamic labor force and the prosperity of any nation. This is perhaps why countries like America, Canada, or Australia with a wide range of traditions and customs always enjoy stable and harmonious advancement.
To be more, The diversity of cultures could enhance residents' cognitive and social development. With a rich blend of nationalities, customs, and traditions, each person perceives and respects the significance of the similarities and differences among others. Therefore, they collaborate and cooperate harmoniously side by side, which creates a civilized community and well-being nation. Besides, those who are in multi-cultural societies are more likely to open-minded and tolerant of others' customs and religions.
However, a wide range of national traditions also leads to some conflicts among people. These differences might seem trivial but sometimes that makes it difficult for some immigrants to customize to the mainstream of local social life. But multi-cultural societies are usually based on equality, so these problems can be eventually be dealt with successfully.
To sum up, despite some drawbacks, I strongly side with the view that the diversities in social culture are advantageous for the development of a nation.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6654676259 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27890473987 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629496402878 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4033552243 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.5 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100232399454 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367463687554 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029052000334 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0540599104734 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319211002493 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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