Nowadays, more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that is a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
it has always been argued among people whether to choose a job that you like doing it or a job that pays more. every group has some solid reason for their opinion. In my view both groups have ideas worth considering.
The major concept behind having a job is to earn money and as the wage goes up it could change many things in someones life. We people have to work for almost thirty years in our life to reach retirement and a job with good salary not only means more money in your work life but also more when you reach retirement and in a world that money can change almost every aspect of life earning more money has always been appealing.
Apposing to the idea of better money leads to better life quality, there are people who consider the time you spend at work a very important part of life and conclude that if you do what you like the most as a job you will be a happier person even though if it does not pay as much as boring or hard jobs. This idea comes from the notion that an adult person spend most of his time at work and if he persuade himself to work in jobs that are stressful with high workload or long shift works or even jobs that demand working in hazardous conditions, there is a great chance that he becomes depressed or even put his life in danger. so it does not worth it.
In conclusion working in job which results in better salary has a lot of benefits and so do a job which you enjoy doing it and does not impose great amount of stress and job demands on you. In my view, it is the best to find a job that has some good aspects of both sides of the argument and do not make an extreme decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: persuades
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1331.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.159375 5.12529762239 81% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.98761792103 2.80592935109 71% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509375 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.069323338 49.4020404114 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.1 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124650933859 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587400216967 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051107409925 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927048183498 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597033656823 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 11.3001002004 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.44 12.4159519038 60% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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