Nowadays, young people admire stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In today’s world, admiration which the young generation holds for celebrities is not a rare phenomenon. While there is a widely held belief that famous people badly influence youngsters rather than bring them benefits, it is my fervent conviction that there are more advantages than disadvantages to this trend.
Firstly, stars display positive characteristics that spur young people to become good citizens. A telling example is that celebrities who participate in charitable project more or less instill ethos of sharing and caring into the young generation. There is mounting evidence that juveniles can be inspired and learn from their idols’ good qualities, which is not only conducive to their self-improvement but also to the well-being of the society as a whole.
Secondly, famous people can also set a good example to adolescents via their mistakes and failures. There is a high possibility that stars who are arrested and criticized for violent cases or drug abuse may lead youngsters to regard such behavior as shameful and inadvisable. Hence, stars can serve as leverages for juveniles to avoid mistakes and make progress, which are of enormous importance to their lives both at school and in the future.
In conclusion, I believe that this trend facilitates adolescents’ development. Furthermore, it is also advisable to note that the nub of the argument lies in the perception of juveniles, which determines which aspects of celebrities to learn from.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 233.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40343347639 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15992352602 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600858369099 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.161488018 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.9 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130579304251 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558798279315 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055305157864 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722250120522 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323291057226 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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