In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Essay topics:

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

Some people believe constructing new railway line is better than improving existing public transport, and other people believe oppositly. I think there are no answers, sometimes new railway is better, sometimes not.

Constructing new railway for fast trains can reduce time that taken when move to another city. For instance, in my country, Korea, train named 'KTX' is express train. When I want to go to Busan from Seoul(both cities are in my country) by a car or usual train, moving time is about 5 to 6 hour. However, KTX take only 2 hours. Using KTX is fastest way, and it is faster than air plane. Actually by air plane, it takes only 1 hour to flying, but we could waste too much time by going to airport and by wating for air plane in air port. This is big benefit to someone who takes business trip often. Also this means the cities which located nearby station can more close than other cities which straight distanse is shorter. Infact, in Seoul, going to Busan by KTX is spent less time than Gapyeong, which is more close to Seoul. Therefore this should helpful to cities' economy which nearby station by increasing of tourist.

Most people are using public transportation like subway, more than express train. Some stations have bad facilities, like stink toilet, broken chairs. Especially, in rush hour, subway is so croud. So improving existing transport is needed.

I think, in my country, the public transportation system is already great. Subways have clean seats and station's inner is well designed for customer's conveinent. So in my opinion, construction of new express line is more needed in my country.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
...sual train, moving time is about 5 to 6 hour. However, KTX take only 2 hours. Using ...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the fastest'.
Suggestion: is the fastest
...wever, KTX take only 2 hours. Using KTX is fastest way, and it is faster than air plane. A...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... someone who takes business trip often. Also this means the cities which located nea...
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Line 3, column 824, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...Gapyeong, which is more close to Seoul. Therefore this should helpful to cities economy w...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85611510791 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50343173191 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593525179856 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3762794819 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0526315789 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6315789474 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230173374022 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721691468434 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927646318993 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165890227787 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992776880225 0.056905535591 174% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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