obesity in children
Many children are suffering from obesity, which was once described as an adulthood disease. Sedentary lifestyle is the main reason for this health issue, and encouraging children to exercise can be the main solution.
Due to a ppealing features of video games, children spend more time on these games rather than playing actively. They choose to play these new games because of c omplex visual features of them, which are significantly appeal ing to teenagers. Therefore, children are deprived of the essential activities that can burn off extra calories they receive on a daily basis. Last year researchers published an artic le that confirmed the reduction of children’s activity during day compared to their previous generation, and the substantial difference between the body mass index of these generations.
Children should be encouraged to exercise on a regular basis so as to prevent obesity among them . The best way to encourage children to exercise is to give them positive feedback and prizes. Schools can consider significant awards for winners in sports festivals, which can encourage children to enhance their daily activity in order to win such prizes. For instance , a secondary school in Isfahan held different sports competition for its students last year. They offered new play station console for the first place winners. As a result of this reward, most of the students in the school enrolled in c ompetition to try their chances.
In conclusion, some adulthood health problems are becoming more prominent among children. Obesity is the major issue that represent the sedentary lifestyle of younger generation . If we want to tackle this problem, we will need to have appealing solutions, such as excellent rewards. Without proper plans a sizeable number of children will have suffered from obesity within a few years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27551020408 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7711071829 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615646258503 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5425693541 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9375 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317940179339 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100889461613 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089888676697 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186277824445 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540059279025 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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