One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages
An increasingly elderly population with high longevity is derived from medical advanced. However, it might initially appear desirable to be aging of society, but on closer inspection, the idea suffers from several problems.
Arguably the gravest problem caused by longer expectancy rises in the demand for recipients of healthcare. There is a shortage of beds and medical treatment which are keeping the elderly alive in hospitals. In fact, families are becoming smaller and more dispersed, which means that young adults will decrease the time to look after their elderly relatives. A further serious impact is an insufficiency of wealth available in society to sustain the retired population. Due to the shrinking workforce and slower growth of population size, governments may well lessen money in taxes. This means that the tax burden on workers becomes intolerably high, and can eventually stifle economic growth.
While it may be correct that old people also offer for other benefits of family, for example, their children may receive an adequate inheritance from their parents who are in a stronger position with better financial security. Addition, older employees have a wealth of experience and specialized knowledge they have obtained throughout their working lives, ensuring the consistency of staff training of an organization. It still appears to be the case, however, that the issues are overmatching by these benefits.
To conclude, the problems of health treatment and tax burden combine together to make life expectancy a challenging, especially when the elderly cannot be independent. This is not to say that all retired people suffer in this way, but it appears to be the case very frequently
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40520446097 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85813897787 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639405204461 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4258397651 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.846153846 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0792794727668 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.027979039964 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032230201255 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0497449658301 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374758557714 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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