One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
As medical facilities and healthcare procedures have improved, patients can receive immunisation and treatment for various diseases that were once deadly to us. As such, the average lifespan of individuals has increased. However, better healthcare also has some drawbacks. This essay agrees that the benefits of better healthcare outweigh the drawbacks. The essay will first demonstrate how increased life expectancy is advantageous and how the disadvantage of increased healthcare cost is not valid.
Healthcare procedures have become less intrusive and dangerous with fewer fatalities, thus allowing one to live a longer life as a result of new technologies involved. Research on drugs has also led to new vaccinations that immunise individuals from fatal diseases, therefore allowing one to live more healthily. With longer lifespans, people are able to enjoy life for a longer period of time and spend more time with their families. It also led to later retirement ages, allowing one to contribute more to the country’s economy. A study on Singaporeans by the Ministry of Health in 2017 revealed that life expectancy today is approximately 5 years longer than in 2007, with the retirement age set to increase to 65 years old in the years to come.
On the contrary, improved medical treatments have become more expensive as healthcare organisations such as Hospitals and specialist clinics need to remain profitable. However, as individuals are now healthier, the need to visit these places to receive treatment would become less frequent. Coupled with healthcare subsidies to its citizens by the government, the increase in price for every visit would not increase by much. For instance, a study by the American Health Organisation in 2018 found that Americans spend $7,000 less on average annually than in 2015. and also visited the clinics or hospitals fewer times.
In conclusion, while it is understandable that improved medical treatments will see an increase in price to ensure that profit is made, the drawbacks of it are minimised as people are healthier and do not require treatment as often. Meanwhile, an increase in life expectancy allows one to fulfil more things in life and spend the necessary time with their family, therefore the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36164383562 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00337459542 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490410958904 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5011121978 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.117647059 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205802313042 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577911502308 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559817247564 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125108756225 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702837293181 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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