One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweighs the disadvantages?
Over the years, the medical sector has evolved greatly. This implies that the life span of humans are rising as people tend to have longer lifetime. I opine that the advantages of this view supersedes the disadvantages because of its benefit to the society and family.
To begin, people are glad to live a longer life since longevity is the pursuit of most human. This is not of benefit to them alone as it has a great impact on family life and the society. Longevity provides people the opportunity to pass down generational knowledge to their offspring as wisdom is mostly linked to elders. It as well harmonizes relationship within the family. Also, increase life shelf allows people to contribute more to the world with their talent and skills. So many talented youngsters died with their knowledge. For instance, an Afro pop musician Fela Anikulapo Kuti died at a young age. He would have been a pacesetter for othe musicians to follow. Imagine if nothing is done and young talented people are left to perish. What effect would it have in our society? The world will be deprived as this people lack the opportunity to pass what they know to the younger generations.
In contrast to this view, advancement of medical care in strengthening peoples life are deleterious because people are prone to aging diseases, it as well result in overpopulation. To elucidate, old age predisposes people to risk of age related diseases such as hypertension, diabetes milletus, senile dementia to mention few. According to research conducted by World Health Organization in 2016, people above the age of 40 are prone to hypertension while people of age 70 are at risk of senile dementia. This disease factors renders the old less efficient and overly dependent. In addition, sustaining peoples life leads to rapid increase of the population. Therefore, the available resources are less sufficient for the people due to increased life span.
In conclusion, enhanced lifespan contributes to increase population and the aged being dependent. I strongly opine that its benefits to the family and society outweigh its drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11461318052 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83816926931 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558739255014 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6902378531 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1363636364 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8636363636 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210849912796 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588053865818 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055351030383 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124885075069 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645587936852 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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